A light edit

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It’s always a pleasure to work for a client who understands that translation is an art rather than a science. Here is a fragment of a leaflet translated by an English-speaking Pole that I was asked to sub-edit. (I have cut some text so as to disguise the location.

Before…

Wink at us … with your camera

The Museum is not only an interesting place for those who are hungry for all the information about the industrial history of the city. It’s also an attractive spot for photographers. Exhibit lighting and an interesting space arrangement will enable even amateurs to take good pictures. We are one of the few museums in Poland where taking pictures is not only allowed but even encouraged. If you want a photo souvenir – you’re more than welcome to take one in our museum. You can also share your pictures on our Facebook Fanpage.

What are the stages of cotton textile production– from picking the flowers to weaving cotton? What is the melody of the 19th century looms, played on four shuttles by museum monuments? If you don’t know – go to the Museum. Here you will learn not only everything about the old looms and cotton but also familiarize yourself with the history of the plant – from the 19th century to the People’s Poland era.

The exhibition was designed to include all the latest multimedia presentations, film projections and historical reconstructions. Every visitor can listen to the clatter of operating looms, touch cotton at every production stage and create fabric design by themselves. The combination of historical exhibits and modern attractions will definitely leave a lasting impression on you …

…and after:

Shoot as much as you like!

The Museum is not only an interesting place for those who want to find out about the city’s industrial history, it is also a great place for photography. The way that the exhibits have been arranged and lit will enhance your pictures. We are one of the few museums in Poland where taking pictures is not only allowed, but actively encouraged. If you want a photographic souvenir of your visit – you are more than welcome to take your own photograph. You can also share your pictures on our Facebook fan page.

What are the different stages of cotton production? What is the rhythm of the 19th century looms? Come to the Museum to find out. Your trip of historical discovery will take you from the beginnings of the factory in the 19th century to its swan song during the days of the People’s Republic of Poland. On the way you will find out about how cotton textiles are produced and the purpose of the great machines that once worked there.

The exhibition uses the latest multimedia technology, film projections and historical reconstructions. You can listen to the clatter of the looms, touch cotton at each of its production stages and create your own fabric design. The combination of historical artefacts and modern aids to their interpretation will leave an unforgettable impression… .

The client who places a great value on the choice of the right words was delighted, much to my relief!



2 Responses to “A light edit”

  1. Come on, tell us which Museum it is. It sounds interesting, especially if its not in Łódż.

    There are some ‚not quite right’ translations that I actually like. ‚Wink at us … with your camera’ has the feel to me of a clever English marketing slogan. It may not be right for this museum, but it must be good for something.

    Incidentally, how would you translate ‚Muzeum Fabryki’. ‚The Museum of the Factory’ seems completely wrong to me. My first thought is simply ‚The Fabryki Museum’, which gives the impression of ‚fabric’ – a misinterpretation, but contextually correct. Their’s (is that spelt correctly?) is a website that desperately needs your services, not to mention someone who can use a word processor with an English spelling and grammar checker. See http://www.muzeumfabryki.pl/en

    • 2 szczurekikret

      Theirs is the third person plural possessive pronoun. Their’s does not exist. Their is, of course, the third person plural possessive adjective.


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